About Me
- Cortney, Duane, Zach, and Kellan
- Duane and I have been married a whopping six years! It's gone by so quickly. I've been busily working toward getting my book published. Zachary and Kellan are such fun additions to our little family. Kellan's pretty new as of last March, and Zach will be three in October. They are such a joy, thank heaven for little boys!
Cortney, it looks good. You've done a lot of work on this. I thought the following paragraph was a little confusing, though.
ReplyDeleteAccustomed to following Zoe’s lead, Soleil is on her own with Rowen. And despite the fact that he was sent to either kill Soleil or bring her to his dominating, sadistic coconspirator, Sean Mendell, Rowen finds himself equally taken with the serene, unsuspecting girl. He also finds himself not only unable to do his job, but not wanting the life of a manipulative hit man at all.
I don't know that you need "accustomed to following Zoe's lead" to start it off. You might want to clarify why that has anything to do with how Soleil is acting. I would also rework the last sentence, may to something like this: Not only does he find himself unable to do his job, but he no longer wants the life of a hit man at all.
It's good. I would just say keep going through it and making it as concise as possible.